Wednesday 2 August 2017

Seeing through Fresh Eyes

We used the video below as inspiration for some descriptive writing.


The Watchmen took on the role of the people in the video who witnessed the Orangutan, they were challenged to use 'Show not Tell' in their description.

Boston
The stranger who entered my kitchen had long, shaggy, reddish orange to dark brown hair hung from his extended front limbs. I was just getting the order ready for table 42 (two steaks one medium rare and the other well done). He sauntered up to my station and stared at the red hot flame. His large chocolate eyes showed that he was frighted of the fire. He started to walk away looking at the other things in the kitchen like knives, busy chefs and bustling waiters carrying plates.

Connor  
I nearly finished my shift I was on my last route before heading back to the depot. It was a successful day I had a full bus, it looked liked the passengers had all been Christmas shopping with bags bursting with toys and wrapping. Long, shaggy, reddish orange to dark brown hair hung from the extended front limbs of the next passenger. He took a seat. He sauntered closer and closer to me, the closer he got the more adrenaline pumped through my heart. His large cinnamon eyes expressively showed his confusion at his new surroundings. He stared out the bus window and witnessed all the things that a human being would see every day such as the water fountain, the road and the ice cream truck. When my doors next opened the stranger made his way carefully down the steps and onto his next adventure.  

Mizuki
I was at my favourite restaurant with my friend Sam, to celebrate his birthday. I ordered two chicken burgers with chips and tomato sauce. A creature with long, shaggy, reddish orange to dark brown hair came up to our table. He had extended front limbs and sauntered like an old man. His large rich chocolate eye expressively showed his curiosity at these new surroundings. He looked confused watching the people in the restaurant eating their food. He strolled with his great arms and legs. He pushed the door gently and went into the kitchen. He went outside to explore the huge beautiful word

Tariq       
I was in the kitchen getting food ready for table 42. The order was chicken and two steaks cooked medium rare. The order was almost ready to be picked up when  a stranger with long, shaggy, reddish orange to dark brown hair sauntered in. His large rich cinnamon eyes expressively showed his shock at these new surroundings. He looked close to the flame. The hairy beast was shocked, he ran away like an antelope running away from a fierce tiger.

Suyash
I was working in my office sending an urgent email to the suppliers when I witnessed a mysterious creature climbing the building in front of our office.  The stranger had long, shaggy, reddish orange to dark brown hair hung from his extended front limbs. His large hazel eyes expressively showed his interest at these new surroundings. He climbed slowly with his long arms looking at the lights of the city, amazed. The creature strolled along the city streets and then made his way gingerly onto the 277 bus.

Jacky
Long, shaggy, reddish orange to dark brown hair hung from his extended front limbs. The stranger in the dark city sauntered in the restaurant, swung on the light bulb and landed on the floor loudly. It gave me a fright. My mouth hung open wide as I witnessed the beast. My spaghetti fell off my fork and landed in my bowl. His large hazel eyes expressively showed his curiosity at these new surroundings. The stranger walked into the kitchen, the chef was shocked and screamed the furry animal was scared too and quickly strolled out of the restaurant.

Nikhil  
Long, shaggy, reddish orange to dark brown hair hung from his extended front limbs. The stranger in the city sauntered like a slow man up to the bus stop. I was driving an enormous 277 bus. I pulled up to the stop, he entered and sat on an old seat made out of wood at the back. His large rich chocolate eyes expressively showed his confusion at these new surroundings. He looked a bit troubled as he stared out of the bus window as we passed wind farms spinning. The curious creature pressed the stop button on the tall yellow handles, I stopped the bus at the next stop and he made his way carefully down the steps and onto his next adventure.  

Rayan

Long, shaggy, reddish orange to dark brown hair hung from his extended front limbs. As I was coming home from work I saw the stranger in the city sauntering through the night like a ghost. His large rich chocolate eyes expressively showed his confusion at these new surroundings. He made his way through the street and went inside a restaurant into the kitchen and watched the red hot burning flame curiously.

The Green Lantern Corps took on the role of the Orangutan. The challenge here was to describe the different sights, smells, sounds he would have experienced. However as they were writing from the perspective of an Orangutan they weren’t able to refer to objects by their name.

Alexus
Precariously I swung my way down to the ground. I made my way through the concrete jungle, wondering what was going on? Hesitantly I crept around. I came to a stop where I could smell food. The delicious scent dragged me to a halt. I came face to face with a giant rectangular plank. Tumbling my way through the wooden plank, I came across a strange place. I could hear a lot of noises from the unusual creatures within. I looked around with amazement wondering what things were about?  My eyes caught a glimpse of creatures that were swimming around in water. Looking around I saw hairless apes eating their food. Making my way through, I was looking around at all the puzzled faces. I watched the sun go round and round. The twinkling lights dazzled from above. I returned home where no strange creatures were found.

Charlie
The jagged object wouldn’t stop moving. With hesitation I carefully stepped onto the grey contraption. Stumbling I quickly got back my balance. Looking around there were strange hairless apes who were stood on their hind legs. The hairless apes look confused to see me in their habitat. My feet felt tingly on the moving rectangle. Wondering how I was going up without taking a step I looked up to find little suns spread out on top of white pieces of log that were placed above me. On a slant the mysterious grey track was heading into something new. I stepped off onto the smooth flat ground. Spotting another long peculiar moving object I decided to try going on it again. I stepped onto the strange machine and in front of me stood a pair of strange creatures talking in a language I had never heard before. Looking back at where I had came from the colorful dressed creatures pointed at me and whispered to each other as the moving ground took me further away. Ignoring the stares I looked outside the window to find bright stars brought down from the sky lining the roads.

Kristy
I hesitated for a moment, before I slowly put my foot down on the long moving object. With a slight jolt I stumbled onto it. It kept moving forwards and wouldn’t stop. Turning my head around I could see the hairless apes curiously staring at me, with confused expressions. Whispers came from out of their mouths and they looked at me like I was some sort of stranger. The strange creatures were talking in a complicated language that I had never heard before, and raising their voices at the smaller apes. As the silver rectangular contraption led me up to the top my hands fell off the edge. I jumped up. Looking up I could see many tiny suns watching over me. Walking across the smooth, cold ground my feet tingled and my legs started to shake vigorously. I spotted another moving floor and decided to have another try, this time feeling more relaxed and confident. On an angle the silver rectangle led me down to the bottom. I enjoyed the ride as there was no walking involved. At the end my long, shaggy strands of hair very nearly got stuck in the sharp, grey teeth. Multiple times I went back and forth between the two moving floors. I enjoyed the thrill of it every time. Staring out of the clear square I could see all the stars brighten up the concrete jungle.

Joshua
Strolling through the clean box and sniffing the air, lots of scents travelled through my nose and I leapt onto a short tree without leaves. Looking around me I saw heaps of hairless apes holding silver sticks. They poked the brown and green lumps and then ate them. Many small suns hung from the canopy. Finding a cave, I entered and found myself staring at fires burning on smooth rocks. Hollow rocks that were split in half hung on small, stiff vines. I went over to one of the fires and wondered how it came out of nowhere. The fire licked a rock that one hairless ape held. It then got tipped over and I saw what those things had been eating. Tipped onto a flat slab of rock, it got carried out. I gazed at the fire in wonder. How did they capture suns? How did they make fire out of nowhere? My mind was bursting with hundreds of questions. I sauntered out of the cave and as I did, the things sitting down turned and looked at me.

Shreyas
Roving through a huge cave, thousands of suns beamed brightly at me.  Apes covered in a very strange colourful hair glared at me with a puzzled expression.  Everyone pointed at me.  I felt unnerved because nothing else swang on the vines.  The strange noise made me feel like shaking and moving around.  I saw a moving floor and got frightened.  I shivered as I stepped on the moving floor.  The amazing contraption transported me.  It felt strange moving without putting in any effort.  Soon I entered a dark cave with creatures floating on a wall.  I saw my home. I saw another creature swinging on trees just like me.  I wondered about the strange floating place.  Then unanticipatedly the magical land disappeared. A strange a scent dragged me toward a box filled with small puffy white things.  I tasted one anxiously and it was delicious.  I shoved all the contents of the box into my mouth in one gulp. I went outside with the rest of the crowd.

Tvisha
Anxiously I stumbled through the crowd of tall and short creatures draped in strange materials. I saw a moving floor and nervously put my foot forward, I stumbled around and after a few minutes I caught my balance and roamed on.  I opened two large moving trees without leaves, I walked through and the place suddenly became dark. Was it night time already? Every step I took I seemed to trip over these weird concrete mountains. I saw my home and those creatures in my habitat. Curiously I sat on a soft rock and stared at the moving things for a long, long time.  A creature in front of me pulled out a small glowing rectangle out of their cloth and stared at it. The moving pictures stopped moving so I trooped out of my habitat in a room and slowly followed the crowd. The creatures stared at me with a puzzled expression on their faces as I stared at the small sun's shining straight at me.

Siya
Nervously I crawled through the crowd of tall and short creatures, I had no idea where I was and what I was doing? It was cold but these weird hairless things were wearing these pieces of what looked like colourful leaves. The hairless apes were looking at  me out of the corner of their eyes. I peered into the clear white rectangular hole and saw a roundish thing with a tiny sun. I put my foot on the moving hard rocks and then took it back, it felt funny then suddenly I stumbled on. It felt so weird moving without walking, as I reached the top I saw the creatures  were putting their foot forward so I did too.

Sativa
I sauntered through the concrete jungle, ignoring the weird creatures around me. Thousands of dazzling little stars blinded me. This beautiful, mysterious land had huge pictures that moved. Everything had turned black. It was like I was in a cave but except it was a whole lot different. The strange living things sat down and laid their eyes on the moving picture. Sounds came from every direction. The glow from the moving picture led me to this sky-high metal tree. A twinkling sun from the top of the box shone at me, I raised my arm to touch it. Nothing happened. My arm had just went right through the sun. Square things shimmered in the dark. “crunch” I had stepped on this yellow, golden crunchy fruit. Taking my very first bite into this mystical, crumbly fruit I was astonished.

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